I will never forget this day, everything happened so fast as if time just sped up so we could fall in love with in seconds. But i shall get back to where it started, it was a beautiful smooth morning, Mother and Nurse we're discussing about me getting married. It is an honour that I dream not of, but I know now. I want my dear Romeo. Well after Mother and Nurse went, I had to get ready for the family Capulet party, ofcourse the party is always the same, but not this time. this evening changed my life forever and i would never be the same again. Our eyes touched for the first time and I was gone. Our lips touch for the first time and i was gone. He was Kissing by the book. I had never felt such a heavenly grace. But Nurse, never will I ever hear her say "Your Mother craves a word with you." ruining that perfect moment and pulling everything out of proportion. Romeo, Montague, it ran through my mind, around and around. Diary, how do you think it would work between sweet Romeo and I? Later that night on my balcony, I was talking to the stars, I was asking for him, asking the stars to bring Romeo to me, telling them that Romeo can take my life.'Tis but thy name that is my enemy. Not knowing that he was right below me, I was really embarrassed by the fact that he heard all the things I said, but didn't really mean. Luckily it was late into the night so he could see me blushing. I was really confused weather I should of talked to him or not, but I just did because it was rather exciting and embarrassing. We talked about how we would be together and what we happen. I was also really confused and pressured about what would happen between us because I thought it was too quick and that we needed to slow down and settle before we go any further, but I also wanted to be with him completely, so I kind of blabbed out that I wanted to get married and that I would sent out a messenger to Romeo to sort out the time and place of where we shall get married and consummate it in bed. im nervous but also very excited. We said our thousand times good night! but I didn't want to say goodnight, parting is such sweet sorrow. That was a good ending to a good night, and I shall say goodnight to you Diary.
Goodnight.
Nice starting and ending, but you might want to highlight the quotations you included in a different colour, and setting it out to paragraphs
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you mentioned about the mother and the nurse. I liked how you talked about what Juliet felt at the time. It was good. Maybe higlight the quotes next time so they stand out more clearly.
ReplyDeleteYou have correctly identified the main things which are going through Juliet's mind, and it certainly reads like a diary.
ReplyDeleteHowever, the whole thing seems a little too short and hurried to give us the depth of insight I was looking for, and the overall lack of sufficient quotation to back up your ideas leaves it ultimately rather thin.
Are you sure you gave this as much time and effort as you could have done to do it (and you) justice?
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