He’s amazing, beautiful in every possible way. His face, tendered to perfection. His name? Romeo, he’s mine and he always will be mine. The way he looked at me in that room, it felt like I was the only girl in the world. The only one he cared about, the only one he wanted to touch.
Diary, Today I had my first kiss, it was incredible, those pilgrims of his, I could kiss them all day long. It was really nerve racking at first, I didn’t know what he was doing, but those shining blue eyes of his grabbed my attention, I had no choice but to kiss him back. It all started from there….father I feel so terrible; mother is not going to be happy when she finds out about all the disobedient things I’ve done today. The worst part about it is that I’ve only known Romeo for less than a day. I’m marrying this man, or should I say boy? It’s all going too fast. But I seem to like all of it… I enjoy his company and his comforting words, he just makes me happy. Soon we shall take thee at thy word. Marriage, it is an honour that I dream not of until now.
I’m only 14, people may think I’m too young to love, but if only they could feel what me and Romeo have… then they wouldn’t be able to judge, because what we have is real. Why do people have to judge teenagers like me for loving a boy? I may be young but I do feel love when I’m with Romeo.
There’s just one problem, my parents, his parents, if they find out that I and my aesthetic Romeo have been seeing each other… my life is will be banished. He’s so irresistible, every kiss, every touch, I just can’t get enough. Our lips shall re- connect again; our uncontrollable passion will start… and will never end.
Diary, may I tell you something? It’s quite personal, but I must let it out. Whilst me and Romeo were talking on the balcony i felt this tingling sensation throughout my whole body. I know sweet, sweet, sweet nurse says seek happy nights to happy days but I am quite frightened of losing my purity. Even though I want to because I want to satisfy him but I have to remember that I’m only fourteen.
These were the exact words Romeo blurted out just before I had to leave, O wilt thou leave me so unsatisfied? I was shocked, because I actually knew what he meant. Still in shock though, he calmly said The exchange of thy love’s faithful vow for mine.
I am overwhelmed by the situation and the fact that I am getting married to the one I truly love. But we are “two households”, the problem is that we are two DIFFERENT households… with parents that do not get along, he’s a Montague, and I’m a Capulet. Why do names have to make everything so difficult? What’s in a name? Nothing, it’s just all the things within the name that people judge. O Romeo, Romeo! Wherefore art thou Romeo? I wish you were here next to me right now so I could fulfill his pleasures. I must go now, Good night, good night! A thousand times good night! xxx
(sorry that its a day late, my internet cut off at 9, and then the blog kept saying i couldn't post on the wiki)
This was a really entertaining piece to read! I thought you wrote it very well with a good use of knowledge and language. The quotations seemed to fit well into the story, but maybe try to seek a deeper meaning in them next time! :)
ReplyDeleteThis is a fantastic diary entry. Well done indeed! You have immersed yourself in her character with tremendous adeptitude, and understood her complex mindset brilliantly, even on difficult issues such as the loss of her virginity. Your writing is fluent, expressive and convincing - whilst also evidencing an inherent analysis of the textual references you use. Well done!
ReplyDeleteHowever, despite the large amount of quotation in your second half (which strikes the perfect balance), the first half of your diary ideally needed more textual evidence to give it sufficient context. Remember: in English, ALL ideas, however good, must be firmly rooted in the text.
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