Dear Diary
Oh my God! I have had the time of my life, and I owe it all to the glorious Juliet, the beauty of Verona. Before the Capulet’s party, I thought that Rosaline was the all-seeing sun, but now I’ve realized I have wasted all my time loving her and am now convinced that it is Juliet that teaches the torches to burn bright. I have now finally had the true taste of love and am thirsty for more. There was a disease, slowly creeping inside of me that was killing me from within, but Juliet was my cure and has completed me. It is she that makes me love life like never before. Not once have I felt this much joy and content until this very night. I was a fool when I loved Rosaline. Immature and impulsive. I used to wallow in self-pity, but when I met Juliet, she has put a spell on me and since then I have changed. Juliet is my heart
It was during the Capulet’s party where I first laid eyes on the majestic Juliet and fell instantly in love with her. And to think that I thought I was in love with Rosaline. She is a goddess and I am a sin when compared to her, and I have profaned her with my unworthiest hand by touching hers. It was in the elevator just after we met where we exchanged lips and kissed. My body was a firework that was ready to set off, and the moment we touched, I felt the sparks of a cluster of Cupid’s arrows rapidly warming up within me. My whole body just exploded and it was at that moment that I knew who I was truly in love with, and truly want to be with until the end.
It was only after the party, however, that I found out that Juliet was part of the Capulet family, and that is when my whole body melted. My life is my foes debt I thought. But that didn’t worry me too much, because what’s in a name? I went back to the Capulet’s house after Mercutio dragged me away. I ran to their swimming pool and heard the elevator open, so I went to hide. But then it was actually Juliet that came out, and she started to talk about me. I was excited but nervous at the same time. So many questions were running through my mind. “Is she going to talk about how much she loves me?” Or “is she going to talk about bad things about me?” “Shall I hear more, or shall I speak at this?” but before I could go on, she mentioned about her surrendering herself to me. o blessed, blessed night! That is when I came out of the shadows and did as she asked.
It was after that point which me and Juliet ecstatically expressed each other’s love for one another. Tomorrow I shall be married to her. The happiest day of my life. I last saw her on her balcony, and climbed up her orchard fence, for stony limits cannot hold true love and received a necklace I will never take off or lose. I and Juliet are definitely meant for each other, and we will leave the world and all the people behind and live with each other for ever.
I really liked your first paragraph!
ReplyDeleteBut isn't the "elevator" and "swimming pool" referring to the movie?
thank you. and yes, i based mine on the movie, which i probably shouldnt have done now that i think about it :S i was unsure
ReplyDeleteI echo justastudent's point about the swimming pool, so make sure you avoid those mistakes when you come to the essay. However, that said, this is an insightful and perceptive piece of diary writing which gives us a genuine window into his frame of mind.
ReplyDeleteIt is much stronger in the first half though, and perhaps glosses over the important Balcony Scene somewhat. In addition, I think there is perhaps room for a little more quotation than you have included.
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