Tonight was the most wonderful night I had ever had. Cupid must have shot his arrow and flew me to the most beautiful girl in the whole world. O, she doth teach the torches to burn bright. She stands out like a lighthouse in the fog. Back then I was the fog, and her light shone through me and saw me for what I really am. I now know what it's like to be loved. Like two magnets love goes towards love.
Enough of my love for her, let me describe the anxious beauty within her. For I ne'er saw true beauty till this night. No one has ever been more beautiful. Even Rosaline. Rosaline? Who's Rosaline? I have forgot that name. Speaking of names, my lover is a Capulet. Juliet Capulet the only living daughter of my great enemy. O that shouldn't worry me, since my love for her is so strong no thorn will ever prick its delicateness.
When our eyes first met fireworks must have been lit in both our eyes. When we had our first kiss it was magic. When I kissed Juliet my sin was finally purged. Pity her nurse had to separate us as we were about to finish our second sonnet and have another kiss. I could have gone on for hours at that party. It's funny to think how a girl of fourteen years of age, a very obedient girl can flirt so well with me and drag me closer, ever so closer to her smooth, soft lips. It was the most amazing party in my whole entire life.
Then Mercutio had to drag me away. As I saw my sun, my love following me, my heart longed to be with her, like a baby clinging to its mother. I couldn't stand it. I must see her again so I raced off and came across a balcony. In the distance I heard Mercutio shouting, "Romeo! humours! madman! passion! lover!" That didn't affect me, because I was passionate to see my lover again.
There was a light from yonder window. It was my lady. O, it was my love. She really is a bright shining angel, especially as she stared at the two shinning stars. I was well hidden. She would never see me. When she said my name my heart beated like a monkey trying to get out of its cage. I dared not move, but I wanted to shout out that I am here, but it would have ruined the moment. She continued to speak about me. When she said, "And for that name which is no part of thee, take all myself" I couldn't contain myself any longer. I jumped out of the bushes and showed myself. At first she was shocked. She even told me to go away, and to go to bed, but I stayed because my love was ever so strong.
She wasn't scared for her safety. She was scared for my safety. That proves it. She really does love me, and I love her back. She said, "If they do see thee, they will murder thee". I replied trying to be as romantic as possible saying, "I have nights cloak to hide me from their sight, and but thou love me, let them find me here". Those words were a key to another kiss and as certain as the sun rising in the east, it was. O, Cupids wings really did flutter that night. Pinch me for I believe it was a dream, but the kisses were too real for it to be one. It's a shame the nurse had to call her inside again. Maybe it was for the best because just before she left she told me that she wanted to marry me. O, beautiful love, could you not get any better. "Thy propose marriage" she said. I will. Definitely. I think my heart would burst like a bubble if I don't.
That reminds me, I got to pay a call on Friar Laurence today, for if I don't I will never see Juliet again. With just the sound of her name I hear wedding bells ringing. I better get going. I need to arrange a wedding in secret and make sure no one finds out, not even my father. He can't find out about the wedding or Juliet. No one can.
Good-Morrow
really well down ! i think you did a great job of expressing romeo's teenage self and what he must be feeling. i also really liked what you wrote when 'Rosaline" came up. i think you did a fantastic job with making this into modern English, and modern thoughts (if that makes sense!)
ReplyDeleteSplendid diary entry! I have to commend you of your originality of your metaphor! "..beated like a monkey.." I believe the quotes you have chosen have shown the character and perhaps even the mindset of Romeo.
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ReplyDeleteopps that was a mistake,anyway
ReplyDeleteThat is a wonderfull peice of work, I like how you perfectly described Romeo's true personality and how you used quotes from all sorts of different places and put them into the right types of context(as in modern english).
This is fantastic work, and communicates his teenage anxiety with aplomb. You choose and use quotations adeptly, and back them up with detailed explanation of your characters thoughts and feelings.
ReplyDeleteIf you had been able to squeeze a little more about her from the crucial Balcony Scene, this would have edged firmly into a Band 1 response. Well done.