Romeo’s Diary Entry
This morning I feel that it has already reached afternoon, but it has only struck nine. My feelings, my beliefs, my instincts all go towards one person, but she does not feel the same way. Her rejection was like a knife stabbing someone’s heart, grabbing their lungs and squeezing them until every tear drop comes out of one’s eye. These sad hours seem so long when you know that your life is going to end in misery because someone won’t love you. All I want is to be with Rosaline, but none of my techniques work; I’ve tried staring at her until she loves me, I’ve tried giving her gifts and I’ve also tried telling her that I love her and how beautiful she is every second of the day. But no matter how much I try she just won’t budge. I don’t feel like doing anything else but hate myself, sometimes I feel that she is the most beautiful woman that has ever lived. But people just say that it’s my emotional teenage feelings finally kicking in.
Mercutio came to me this afternoon to tell me that we have to get ready for a Capulet party, but I have already told him that I feel like doing nothing. Knowing Mercutio he kept on telling me how great this party will be, he even told me that I will need to dance, but I replied “I have a soul of lead” therefore my dancing shoes will sink to the ground. Finally something which Mercutio said convinced me to go, it was like I might find someone new. Then I thought to myself that Rosaline was irreplaceable but I would still go to this party.
As we arrived at the Capulet mansion and entered the party I caught a glimpse of what a mutant will call a goddess. I was the mutant and she was the goddess, it was like I have never loved anyone before. She was just perfect! I tried to use my techniques like staring where she stands and hopefully it will lure her eyes towards me but that didn’t work so I tried holding her hand and succeeded. She was shocked that someone who she didn’t know was now holding her hand. I said to her “sorry for my rude unworthy hand, shall I kiss it better to make it pure again”. She replied “you do not have to apologise or kiss my hand, as for our hands have already kissed”. I said “then let lips do what our hands do”. She replied again “I stand still but a man has to move”. From then on I realised that we had made a sonnet together and that must mean something. It means that we were meant for each other!
We kissed a couple of times and tried to make another sonnet together but got interrupted by her nurse. This really annoyed me because I was in love and we had chemistry! The next words that came out of the nurse’s mouth shocked me like an electric eel biting my whole arm off. The shocking words where that she needed to see her mother (lady Capulet). This is such bad mistake because the Capulet’s are our enemy’s but that is only a name for I still love this nameless person.
“I can’t believe that she’s a Capulet” is what I keep on saying repeatedly in my mind. It’s just so confusing right now. Mercutio and Benvolio want to find me but I am hiding behind a wall in the Capulet’s mansion trying to find the love of my life. They eventually go away after trying to manipulate me with Rosaline, but what they don’t understand is that I don’t lover her anymore I love Juliet. Finally I come out and am trying to find her room, as soon as I think I hear something Juliet was out on her balcony talking to the sky looking as beautiful as ever. I’m not sure what to do but instead of coming out I stayed hidden and listened to her privet conversations.
Every second I think I think about Juliet and how she is my sun and how she rises in the east and sets in the west. I thought she just said my name and was talking to me but she was still talking to herself, she was saying “Why Romeo why, don’t be a Montague anymore or if you can’t then let me not be a Capulet”. That was when I thought should I come out or should I stay hidden. But I decided to stay hidden just a little while longer. Juliet continued “Our name is our enemy but our bodies are in love, take me Romeo take all of me”. That is when I jumped out of the shadows and finally spoke to Juliet. She had an excited yet embarrassed face when she knew that I was here, she said “how did you get here and why?” I replied with “I was behind those walls, with love’s light wings did I then fly over towards you.” “If they see you, they will murder you” “But I have the nights invisible cloak”.
We carried on for some time, kissing, talking and saying goodnight but eventually we said goodnight. As I turned to exit the mansion she said “marry me tomorrow, I will call a messenger t at 9:00 to confirm the details”.
That was how today went tomorrow however will be better because I am getting married to Juliet.
really well done ! you described some interesting feelings very well and used some interesting similes, i think some of it is a bit too much of a recount of the events and you should be careful of you tense you used i.e "it HAS only struck nine." but otherwise really well done :)
ReplyDeleteI agree that it is a little too much of a recount of events, but enjoyed reading it nonetheless, and you provide a thorough and detailed account. You also manage to refer to some of the emotions Romeo is going through, and give us some insight into his frame of mind.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I am a little confused as to what point in time you are actually WRITING the diary, as this seems to change at different points. In addition, I think there is room for a few more words and phrases from the text itself, to ensure that all of your ideas are definitely and firmly rooted in the play.
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